The picture above is of the main character, Dokutsuki, and the background is of one of the worlds. The video above review what I have so far :)

Seems like an interesting idea, now, if I was you, I'd lower the cannon sounds on the world on the video.
I like the protagonists hair, by the way.

Thanks! Maybe I will, cause the canon sounds are meant to surprise people and such xD I wish some other people would know about this so I would have some more motivation to finish this, but I think I have enough.

And I'm also open to ideas for worlds :) And I can fit them in with her background story.

I like the bits of shrapnel in her hair. Does her name have a meaning?

Also, I don't quite get how she enters her "dreamworld" (if it can even be called that). I guess she drinks something? Almost makes me think she's an alcoholic, ehehe.

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hey, i'm the one who left you a comment on YouTube.

i agree with >>8275 you should REALLY lower the cannon sounds because seriously, i know it's supposed to be scary, but if i were playing your game, i'd have stopped really fast because i don't like flipping the fuck out every 2 minutes. :/ still as i said in my YouTube comment it looks really promising and i can't wait to see it released to try it myself :)

Yeah, I would lower the volume of it..but they are all events so I would have to go to each one and lower the volume of it.....or I could go to the resource and lower it! But if that doesn't work then I'll have to delete all te events, change it, and paste them all again. But I guess without a little hard work this game would suck xD

Yea her name has a meaning, it means 'with poison' roughly. And she drinks this special potion/medicine/elixir to enduce dreaming. She is kind of a scientist so yeah xD That's what the desk is for. :) The story does have something to do with alcoholics, but not necessarily her hehe, I'll leave it at that. Also the picture I drew here is an earlier drawing of her and another person who'll be in the game.

Thanks for the advice and support! I'll work hard!! Keep it coming :)

k, sorry I'm posting so much, but I lowered the volume of the canon/gun shots by half xD It took a while but yeah, I got it done, I also finished a panorama background for the maze I'm working on here <<<<<-----

Yeah It's supposed to resemble something. I'm now almost done with the maze (Not including things that transport you to other worlds), just need to add some finishing touches and ground tiles xD Which won't take very long xD

I also want some pixeling help and stuff since this will take a while xD SO if anybody wants to help, please do

SO far I am almost done with the first world, I also have the maze done. And I have implemented 1 effect which makes Dokutsuki's joints very noticeable and turns her head into a skull. It's the effect that stops NPCs or scares them away, but I can't test it yet since I haven't made any NPCs yet xD

The picture is what the effect looks like

And I'm still open to advice, opinions, or volunteers!

>>8333
i hope you'll add more in time! i left you a youtube comment, and i'll be looking there to see more from you.

Thanks! I added 1 effect, a maze, and 1 other room since this video xD And I figured out how to do steps! :D I'll make sure to work hard!

I really like your pixel work. I'm creating a fan game myself, and I don't think my work is quite up to par. It looks original even though it's the same formula of girls locked in their room. I like the colours that stick out too.

Is that a lab kit of some sort? Science!!

>>8348
Oh thanks! Ooh what's the name of your fangame? Does it have a thread on uboachan? And what colors stick out? Thanks for liking it, I tried really hard to make it at least a little original :)

And yes, that it a science kit, she's really obsessed with science xD Thanks for the opinion! :D

>>8357
It's actually the thread right below this. Slumberjack. lol.

>>8358
Oh it looks cool, the pixeling looks really good :)

And I made an event in my game! The pixeling pissed me off but it was worth it. It involves a key from a dog dish, a door, and a shoebox xD I'm so proud, I made long term animation!

And I added her sitting when you press the shift key. I'm working on the animation which appears when you recieve an effect

I finished the maze a while ago so here's a screenshot of it! You get to it through the broken bottle that I showed in the video. It's pretty big but not super confusing...but it's still confusing.

I just need to pixel some more stuff for this area then I can move on to the next world!

>>8372
Seems interesting so far, i'll definitely try it out when you decide to put out something playable. I'd change the colours in that maze to something else though, bright blue and green is not the best combination if you ask me. It seems like a generic SNES maze to me.

>>8373
Hmmm, thanks for the advice! :D What color do you think I should change it to?

I'm almost done with the last room for the first! Then after that I'll put the finishing touches on! How many worlds and effects do you guys think I should have to release the v0.00 of this game?

Oh! Just an update, I finished the first world in the fangame! I have a total of 9 maps, 1 world, 1 effect, and 1 event! I'm working on the second effect and one NPC now!

I also recently (2 hours ago) fixed a bug which made you unable to wake up normally or sit after you woke up with the skull effect. I worked for 2 hours only to find it was a switch and code order mistake xD

I really hope I get more replies!

The picture is of a character in the game, her best friend.

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Hey, I've been studying and being at school and such so I might update as often, but I will try to update often! Here's a screenshot of the glass room I'm working on. I am proud with the hand (It's where you get the weapon effect, a glass shard) I made it detailed.

And I added an NPC! It's that thing that's crying next to the hand, it's animated by the way. :)

And if anybody asks for a screenshot of the event room I would gladly post one.

It's just not that easy to take a picture of an event since its animated. I think I'll post another video soon xD ENJOY!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4DgvtRG8AnA

I posted another preview video of Broken Bottles! It shows and event, how to get the skull effect, a preview of two worlds, the maze, and other stuff. I also implemented sitting! ENJOY!

Opinions and advice are open!

(Edit: I'm not trying to be CREEPY creepy, my friend suggested the static so I did it, but it's what in the box that matters, what's in there to make her cry? I think I'll take out the smiling part. Any other advice?)

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< here ya go
have some motivation

As for your game, well... it looks good so far, except if I were you I'd try and pick a less clashing color scheme. In general. Blue, orange, red, green, pink and teal on the main character all at the same time is a little too much for my poor little optic nerves to handle, for one thing.
And that maze is really eye-hurting, at least in the screenshot. One thing you could try is desaturating and lowering the brightness of some of the brighter colors so they seem a bit less MS PAINT CYAN and more muted, you know what I mean? Alternatively try looking up a tutorial on color theory, it might help.

otherwise you have a neat idea and you work quickly, kudos to you

I do like her hair, though I haven't the faintest what the red bits are supposed to be

>>8434
Awww! Thanks for the art! That really boosts my motivation 8D And yeah, I've had problems in the past with clashing colors and making things eyehurt xD I'll look up color theory and try to fix the bright/clashing colors!

Thanks! And i like her hair too xD

>>8436
I like the clashing colors. It has a certain uniqueness that I haven't yet seen in any of the other games. The bright, disorienting colors add it's own sort of creepyness, if I'm making any sense.

>>8443
It does? Thanks! I guess my ability to clash colors has come to use! I already changed the maze's wall colors though and it looks a lot better. I'll try to do my best to make it disorienting! Thanks!

I'm working on the 'Glass Shard' effect which is the weapon of the game.

You can keep the classhing colours but make them less eyebleedy by changing the shade a little. the most eye bleedy part for me is the red and green smack against eachother.

>>8454
Oh you mean the red and green in her skirt? Haha yeah, I looked up color theory earlier and I realized....complimentary colors don't compliment each other very well xD They just make each other stand out xD So I'll try to change the color tones a bit.

But if you're not talking about the skirt then what is it? But if you are, just confirm. I want to make this game enjoyable for most people :D

Oh and pic not really related xD

>>8457
You can't change the way Dokutsuki looks now! I think she looks awesome the way she is.

>>8459
Awww thanks! I wasn't really planning on changing Dokutsuki, it's nice to hear other people like her too :) Thanks!

I like the videos, and it looks good so far!
Just one question, tho, what are those red things in Dokutsuki's hair?

>>8466
Thanks! And They are just random triangle things, or red stuff. She is like a mad scientist type of person.

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Working on an animation for blood when you kill someone! Just an update

Just realized I was marked as anonymous for a while xD Changed my name back to Doodle

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I've been pretty busy with school lately, sorry for the delay. Anyway, here's that tree you wanted.

also some broken glass

Thank you! I've been waiting for those :)

Oh and I'm working on the second main world now! It's the Face world. It's a monochrome ish world with picture in the holes in the ground. There are also going to be bright faces with different expressions everywhere. I'm almost done with all the floor tiles!

And the picture is of the 'GET' and the finished blood splatter!

>>8487
k. tell me when you need more stuff done :D

I'm just wondering, how many worlds/effects do you guys think I should have before I release a version 0.00? I think I asked this before but nobody answered so just bringing it up again :)

No back to typing essays! xD

>>8490
I think there should be a tuxedo effect. I'm not exactly sure why, but it just seems right.

>>8457
complimentary colours do compliment eachother butyou got to work with them to get them to look good. straight green and straight red look pretty shit together. and yes I was meaning the skirt, I really think her design is fine but its just the green in t he skirt. Maybe you could fill the green in with orange or black instead, that will bring her outfit together more.(also thats another thing, nothing in her outfit matches and it looks a tad awkward, so if you make the skirt maybe red and orange with a black border instead of pink?

she's a mad scientist
fashion? she don't have time for that shit man

In all seriousness I agree about the skirt, if you change the green to black it won't look too much different at all, and it'll be easier to look at.
otherwise she looks kind of like a mish-mash of halloween and christmas Wal-Mart getup, and unless that's what you're going for...
but hey! It's your game, after all. Whatever you ultimately decide to do will be fine, I think.

Four or five worlds seems like a good starting number to me. If I were you I'd try and make sure there's something to do in each one.

Hmmm, maybe :) I will see where I could implement it, I already planned out some effects and maybe I could add a tuxedo effect. But I wonder what it should do...

Oh okay, I'll fix the skirt, I like the idea of changing the green to black, thanks :) Oh and the border isn't pink, that was just an error when I was making the picture xD She actually doesn't have a border at all.

I'm working on the second door, I'm making a picture to show what it kinda looks like (but it's not a map. Thanks for the advice guys!

Maybe the tuxedo effect could give her access to a "formal" area, such as a wedding or ball area. I feel you could easily put a delightfully creepy spin on either.

The Tuxedo effect should make you moonwalk.

>>8496
Hmmm.....Oh! You just gave me a wonderful idea! Hehehe starts scheming
>>8497
Maybe if I figure out how to pixel that haha

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Just some art for the new world I'm working on. It's a lot more complicated than the 'Boom' World as I like to call it. It's kind of maze-ish but not really 'easytogetlost'-ish xD It has faces with different expressions everywhere and it connects to two different sub-worlds.

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>>8500
My opinion is you should stop it with the smileys.

>>8501
What do you mean?

I'm working on some water tile animation! Prepare for a headache xD

Hmmm stop it with the smileys? :s

Well I'm done with the water animation and another NPC, I'm going to finish the rest of the faces and make the door to the area.

What anon means by the smilies are these things:
xD :) C: :c :3 :s... etc., etc.

It makes it look like you just crawled out from the fetid, sagging vagina of Quizilla and are still gnawing on the afterbirth.
It is kind of immature, is what I mean. Save that kinda stuff for deviantart.

It probably has nothing to do with your face world.

>>8513
Oh, sorry. It's just that I have a problem with getting what I mean across in real life so I use smileys to make sure people don't get the wrong idea. I am very quiet so I don't like people misunderstanding me and I am kind of young 14 almost 15 actually. Sorry anon...

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I am now done with the door! Time to work on the rest of the faces!

Oh and I'm really busy with school so I won't update as often. Though I will work a lot on the game on the weekends!

Pic not related

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I'm done with the faces! I've placed everything everywhere in the face world and I am now working on the weapon mechanic. Which is the animation for Dokutsuki slicing an NPC with her glass shard.

The pic is of the face world. This is only a small part of it, it's actually a pretty big world. I worked hard on pixeling the sand-ish tiles and holes. Also the water. I took the color clashing into consideration and changed the green in her skirt to black. Any opinions on how the skirt and the world looks?

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Skirt and sand is fine, but the water looks a bit weird.
Pic unrelated.

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>>8525
Hmmm, how is it weird? Is it how it transitions into the sand?

Done with the slicing animation and implementing it into the game! Now I have to figure out how to get the NPC to reappear once you leave the room and exit it again. Does anybody know how?

>>8526
The method used in YN was to place a 'Erase Event' at the end of your knife/npc damage sequence- the event will be back automatically upon re-entering the room.

>>8526
Well on the picture it looked weird, but I'm sure
that if animated, it looks better.

>>8527
Thanks! I did put erase event before but I did not know it would come back automatically upon re-entering the room.
>>8528
Oh yes, I animated it. Thanks for the advice. Nice picture, the cake looks very tasty.

I am going to work on a sub world 'Words' now. And I will be implementing an effect for the Skull and Glass Shard. Any suggestions for worlds? I already have most of them planned out (with which world connecting to which and some sketched out) but I would like to hear some opinions on what worlds you think should be implemented!

quietlydoodling.tumblr.com

That's my tumblr account. I update on the game there with some pictures but I mostly just put the music that I make for my game there. Just if you were wondering what some of the music sounded like. But if you don't you can turn your head the other way....but you know you want to.

Pic not related

Here's some art I made at school while thinking of my fangame. Madotsuki is on the left (in my cuter style) and Dokutsuki is in the middle. One of her effects-in-the-making is one the right and a place in face world is at the top. Enjoy my art!

Any comments?

I commend you, child

>>8541
Thank you very much

Working on the world 'Words'. Just a whole bunch of meaningful words on the ground, and I'm working on the tame enemy sprite. I also connected the bottle place to the glass world.

Pic of Urotsuki I made, not related.

Working on a new effect I think for the first release 0.00 I'll have around 4 effects and 3 main doors open with subworlds. Yes, I have a plan!

>>8565
*Usotsuki

>>8592
Oh yeah! I always get her name mixed up with Urotsuki's name, I'll change it now. remembers when she thought Urotsuki's name was Usotsuki

Working on connecting some sub-worlds and sketching out some new subworlds! I'm pretty much done with words subworld, I just need to make the effect that's there.

I hope I get some opinions because it's nice to know what I can improve with my game. Once I'm done with a couple more sub-worlds I'll post another video. Enjoy some unrelated .flow art

I might not be updating as often, I don't have as much motivation but I am determined (I hope that doesn't contradict itself). I'm still working....albeit slowly...so the next video might come in mid October or early November

I finished the word world, this is a part of it that has more words.

I really like the broken glass theme or whatever. Broken glass freaks me out. Bloody broken glass? eugh. Blood doesn't bother me but glass is like the worst thing to get cut with.

Also, the main character, the red things in her hair, is it shards of bloody glass? I thought it was that before I even read that the title of the game was "Broken Bottles", I looked at the picture in the OP first. If that's shards of bloody glass poking out of her head/hair, that's awesome and horrifying D :

I bring le fanart (and hopefully motivation). :'D

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>>8687
Wow, yeah, glass is the worst to get cut with. And the broken glass part has something to do with the (hopefully deep) story. Anything could be in her hair, really. It would be cool if it was bloody broken glass though :D I'll leave it up to speculation.
>>8691
motivation bar goes to 1500 percent Thank you!!

Pic unrelated but is a steampunk themed pic I sketched in Corel Painter Essentials.

I'm working on a (complicated) map for a new Bigger Sub-world! It's an aiport place that connects to a maze ish hospital (which the design for it will be pretty, kind of, original). I'm working for the design for the hospital design now and will get to pixeling the tiles wayyyy later.

Broken bottles gets little amounts of love. :c
Well, back to designing characters and maps!

>>8726
keep at it, I really wanna try it~

>>8732
Thanks! I wanna see how it turns out too.

I'm almost done sketching the hospital's map and what each room is gonna look like (which is lots of work). I'm also planning to make it kind of like a wandering maze like thing. I hope to make my game a little bit easier to navigate than Yume Nikki's looping worlds and a little harder to navigate than .flow.

I hope to hear more opinions!

I have moved this thread to the new board! Check it out!